This one needs no analysis:
While I sat with the Duchess, at tea,
She inquired: “Do you fart when you pee?”
I replied “Not a bit.
Do you belch when you shit?”
And I felt that was one point to me.
A perfect 10!
This one needs no analysis:
While I sat with the Duchess, at tea,
She inquired: “Do you fart when you pee?”
I replied “Not a bit.
Do you belch when you shit?”
And I felt that was one point to me.
A perfect 10!
Actually, I think that needs a fractional point deduction because the last line doesn’t flow as nicely as the previous 4.
I was reading along in a nice mental canter and then got tripped up with the pacing of that last line. I had to reread it like 5 times before I could say it in my head with the same pace of the other lines. Ofcourse, maybe I am just retarded.
I give it a 9.75. bravo to that limerick
I’ll admit, upon reading again
The last line, to some, might not quite scan
But my point rules, you see
Give weight quite heavily
To jokes taken straight out of the can
ooooo, quit a nice “limerickal” reply. And yes, agree with your point in the reply.
One thing we all should consider:
This is Farris’ game. He’s high bidder.
It’s his bat and his ball.
So just give it up, y’all,
Or your spouse just might end up a widder.
All this rhyming I’ve rather enjoyed,
But this “can” stuff I think I’ll avoid.
Cup of tea mine it’s not.
I don’t dig all that rot.
I’m Jungian. This sounds like Freud.
From the dearth of responses I think
That my rhythm and rhyming must stink.
I thought I did well.
You can all go to Hell,
Or come to my place for a drink.
Papa Goldstein:
My lack of reply ain’t ignoring
And certainly don’t mean you’re boring
I was drunk when you started
And since then I have darted
From practice to working to snoring
As this thread seems to be dwindling, I will add one more then relieve you gentle readers of my folly.
.
There was a young fellow named Nog,
Whose uncle sold ale, wine and grog.
He joined with the fleet.
Liquid bad guys to beat.
Now the bad guys are back in their bog.
.
I wrote this several ways before deciding against being overt in its meaning.
.
Joy to you friends. Peace and contentment be with you.
-Dad
Dad:
Your latest five lines are outstanding
The rhyme is not forced or demanding
You’re skilled at the tech
And sly reference to Trek
And the close makes a nice, succinct landing