Comments on: Limerick Review #2

By: Farris

Farris — Tue, 12 Feb 2008 15:12:13 +0000

Dad:

Your latest five lines are outstanding
The rhyme is not forced or demanding
You’re skilled at the tech
And sly reference to Trek
And the close makes a nice, succinct landing

By: Dad

Dad — Tue, 12 Feb 2008 15:00:31 +0000

As this thread seems to be dwindling, I will add one more then relieve you gentle readers of my folly.
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There was a young fellow named Nog,
Whose uncle sold ale, wine and grog.
He joined with the fleet.
Liquid bad guys to beat.
Now the bad guys are back in their bog.
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I wrote this several ways before deciding against being overt in its meaning.
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Joy to you friends. Peace and contentment be with you.

-Dad

By: Farris

Farris — Sun, 10 Feb 2008 15:48:48 +0000

Papa Goldstein:

My lack of reply ain’t ignoring
And certainly don’t mean you’re boring
I was drunk when you started
And since then I have darted
From practice to working to snoring

By: Dad

Dad — Sat, 09 Feb 2008 19:10:51 +0000

From the dearth of responses I think
That my rhythm and rhyming must stink.
I thought I did well.
You can all go to Hell,
Or come to my place for a drink.

By: Dad

Dad — Sat, 09 Feb 2008 00:42:37 +0000

All this rhyming I’ve rather enjoyed,
But this “can” stuff I think I’ll avoid.
Cup of tea mine it’s not.
I don’t dig all that rot.
I’m Jungian. This sounds like Freud.

By: Dad

Dad — Sat, 09 Feb 2008 00:01:11 +0000

One thing we all should consider:
This is Farris’ game. He’s high bidder.
It’s his bat and his ball.
So just give it up, y’all,
Or your spouse just might end up a widder.

By: Jennifer (lasher)

Jennifer (lasher) — Fri, 08 Feb 2008 21:01:16 +0000

ooooo, quit a nice “limerickal” reply. And yes, agree with your point in the reply.

By: Farris

Farris — Fri, 08 Feb 2008 14:57:50 +0000

I’ll admit, upon reading again
The last line, to some, might not quite scan
But my point rules, you see
Give weight quite heavily
To jokes taken straight out of the can

By: Jennifer (lasher)

Jennifer (lasher) — Fri, 08 Feb 2008 14:43:02 +0000

Actually, I think that needs a fractional point deduction because the last line doesn’t flow as nicely as the previous 4.

I was reading along in a nice mental canter and then got tripped up with the pacing of that last line. I had to reread it like 5 times before I could say it in my head with the same pace of the other lines. Ofcourse, maybe I am just retarded.

I give it a 9.75. bravo to that limerick